Patrick, keep the clown on the left of the compositions for a better consistency in the reading flow. On panel 1, you may want to give an arc (curve) to the water rather than make it fall straight in a band, so that it suggests that someone is pouring it. Between panels 1 and 2, you already have a shift in horizon (the line defining the ground). Make sure you maintain this so that the reader doesn't get the impression that panel 1 is the same scale as panel 2. However, in both panels, you drew the mound almost the same size. Make sure it's distinctly different (larger in panel 1, so that it makes clear you've pulled the camera back a lot in panel 2). Nice going! Funny and poetic at the same time!
Patrick, keep the clown on the left of the compositions for a better consistency in the reading flow. On panel 1, you may want to give an arc (curve) to the water rather than make it fall straight in a band, so that it suggests that someone is pouring it. Between panels 1 and 2, you already have a shift in horizon (the line defining the ground). Make sure you maintain this so that the reader doesn't get the impression that panel 1 is the same scale as panel 2. However, in both panels, you drew the mound almost the same size. Make sure it's distinctly different (larger in panel 1, so that it makes clear you've pulled the camera back a lot in panel 2). Nice going! Funny and poetic at the same time!
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